Jack was lost. Entirely, wholly, completely lost. This wasn’t what he had in mind when he set out on his adventure. Jack tried to remember which way his camp leader told him to go but he just couldn’t remember. It was getting dark Jack had found some vines to make a hammock. His dinner was spaghetti a sausages AGAIN!!!!. A few minutes later Jack was fast asleep ZZZZZZZZZZ. Jack woke up the next day with a pink monkey on his face and he was right next to the national chocolate river of cardlandia. Jack had read about this land in books and on T.V. but Jack had never believed that it was true! Jack could hear his friends at camp calling for him.Jack decided to follow the sound of his friends Jack took the monkey with him. Jack had named the monkey Mika.
A good place to add detail to help the reader imagine a picture in their head was the pink monkey and the chocolate river. They were great places to use some adjectives.
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